Comparison and Contrast Essay- DRIVE A CAR OR TAKE A BUS (First Draft)

Every people use vehicles for transportation. Among many means of transportation, the most common ones are the buses and peoples’ private cars. Many people choose them because of their different aspects of thinking. From a general overview, these aspects are categorized into comfortableness, expensiveness and the effects to the environment etc. Both two way of transportation has their pros and cons. These properties need to be examined in detail to be able to evaluate the most appropriate means of transportation.

One of the areas that one should investigate is the comfortableness of the vehicles. People, of course, would like to use their own cars. Because, they are more comfortable than the public transportation vehicles. People feel more comfortable because there are not any people apart from themselves. They can listen to the radio according to their wish. They do not worry about whether they are standing or sitting. They can make telephone calls in their own cars. They don’t have to wait or catch the buses. When we consider this situation from this aspect, private cars are chosen for transportation.

The second point I would like to compare is the expensiveness. Contrary to comfortableness, when we consider the expensiveness aspect, we conclude that public transportation should be chosen. Inasmuchas, the buses hold and transport more passengers in comparison to the private cars. Thanks to their transportation capacity, energy saving and cheap cost of transportation would be possible with buses and public vehicles. Therefore, staff and personnel transport services and student transport services are performed through these vehicles.

This brings us to the third point I would like to make comparison, their effects to the environment. The public transportation vehicles are environmentally friendly. They hold many people at a sitting. If everyone uses their own cars, there would be chaos in traffic jam. There will be a decrease in exhaust fumes in relation to the decrease in the vehicles in traffic. Therefore, it will be less dangerous for global warming. Moreover, there will be less pollution originated from exhaust fumes. The usage of public transportation will decrease the emission of exhaust fumes per capita to the minimum level.

As a conclusion, I can say that public transportation which is less comfortable and less expensive in contrast to private cars should be chosen with many reasons. Compared with private cars, buses and minibuses’ engines are more powerful because of their structural features. In order not to play a negative-effective role in traffic and be another reason for traffic jam, public transportation should be selected in spite of its unfavorable specialities.

Yasemin ÜZÜMCÜ

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2 Responses to Comparison and Contrast Essay- DRIVE A CAR OR TAKE A BUS (First Draft)

  1. harununler says:

    The differences between driving your private car and taking buses were well adapted in the essay. You compared these two in many logical aspects. Briefly, the structure of your essay is favorable for a comparison/contrast essay, I think. When it comes to the grammatical elements in the essay, there are some mistakes to be corrected:
    1) We use singular forms of words after “every”. In the first sentence, “every people” should be corrected as “every person”
    2) There is a punctuation mistake in the first paragraph. “peoples’ private cars” is to be turned into “people’s private cars” as “people” is plural itself.
    3) The sentence, “Both two way of transportation has their pros and cons.” has grammatical mistakes. “Both two ways of transportation have their pros and cons.” is the corrected form.
    4) With the sentence “there are not any people apart from themselves”, I couldn’t see what you mean.
    5) The sentence “there would be chaos in traffic jam.” seems to be unlogical. “Traffic jam” already involves the negative meaning the “chaos” has. So, “there would be a traffic jam” or “there would be a chaos in traffic” may be preferred instead.

  2. harununler says:

    When the mistekes above are corrected, the essay will be a good sample of the Comparison/Contrast Essay type, I guess. So the point for your essay is 80.

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